Letter of Introduction
Subject: Self-introduction letter
of Teo Joshua
To the readers of my blog,
My name is Teo Joshua, and I am writing this
letter to formally introduce myself and tell you more about who I am as a
person. I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic in April of 2019 with a diploma
in aerospace engineering. I went on to serve my 2 years of national service,
where I trained as an explosive ordnance disposal specialist. I secured a place
at the Singapore Institute of Technology (SiT) as a mechanical engineering student
and began my undergraduate journey in September of 2021.
My interest in mechanical
engineering started when I was working with remotely operated vehicles during
my national service. For such a small robot, I was fascinated by its capabilities,
such as movable arms to grab objects and long-range voice transmitters for communication. I
was also intrigued by the technology behind the coding of the robots to
do what they are supposed to do, which piqued my interest in programming. I found
out that the mechanical engineering degree course at SiT offers a specialization program
in year 2 for mechatronics, which combines mechanical engineering and
programming. Hence, I decided to study mechanical engineering at SiT so I can code my own droid in the future.
One special trait that differentiates
me from the other students is my determination to finish what I started before
tending to other things. When setting my mind to something, I will sit
through it until I have completed what I have set for myself, sometimes even
skipping meals.
One of my strengths in
communication is my volume. I can project my voice to ensure all my audiences can
hear me. To ensure a safe and successful conduct during my national service, my
volume ensures that the men under me can hear what I am saying clearly so they
know what their roles and responsibilities are. As for my weakness, I have a
hard time conveying my thoughts into words. This causes me to stumble and look
back at my pointers, reducing my eye contact with the audience as well as my
confidence, and I end up breaking the flow of my presentation.
Lastly, through this effective
communications module, my first goal is to improve on the weakness I have
mentioned by learning how I can convey my thoughts to words quickly and
confidently. Being able to confidently present will greatly increase the power
of my message, and this skill can easily transfer over to other areas, such as
job interviews. My second goal is to make writing a second nature to me. I aim to eliminate
all common mistakes such as grammar, as well as improve my vocabulary and sentence
structure to make my writing smooth and effective.
I look forward to making the
acquaintance of my classmates and having a fruitful 15 weeks of learning to
become a better communicator.
Best Regards,
Teo Joshua
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Fan Phan
David
Irdina
Hi Joshua,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your introduction and getting to know more about you. Glad to know your interest in studying in SIT came from NS. Paragraphing are well done, necessary points are given and letter is clear and concise.
I hope we can talk more about robots and many different stuff through this 15 weeks. I look forward to working together more often. All the best !
Hi Fan,
DeleteThank you for reading the letter and leaving a comment. I appreciate the remarks! I am also excited to talk to you more about robots and other stuff in the next 15 weeks and beyond. All the best to you too!
Hello Joshua, thank you for writing this self-introduction letter. You have covered all the important pointers and have elaborated very well on all of them. A possible improvement you could make to your letter would be in paragraph 5, the line "My second goal is to make writing second nature." with an addition of "... to me.". Overall, the letter was well written and thought out, and I have learnt a little more about you through it. See you in class!
ReplyDeleteHi David,
DeleteThank you for reading the letter and leaving a comment. I appreciate the feedback! Hope to work with you more often in this module. Thank you and all the best, looking forward to seeing you in class!
Dear Joshua,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this well developed, interesting letter. You certainly portray yourself as being quite unique in terms of your background in robotics and unique NS experience. I hope you can share what you have learned with your various class teammates. It's also good to see that you were inspired to continue your studies at SIT by your interest in mechatronics.
In terms of your comm skills weaknesses and your goals for the module, we will certainly address everything that you have mentioned (as you can already see).
Here's a very minor point of phrasing to take note of:
-- as a mechanical engineer student > as a mechanical engineering student
I look forward to hearing more from you this term.
Best wishes,
Brad
Hi Professor Blackstone,
DeleteThank you for taking the time to read my letter and leaving a comment. I am grateful for the feedback and comment, and I will edit my letter accordingly. I do enjoy the classes up till now and I look forward to working on my weaknesses and goals in this module!
Hi Joshua ! I personally think that you are good writer. You’re sentences are straight forward and can be easily understood. I spot a few sentence which can simplified. I would love to share with you. “ When I have set my mind to something..” can be simplified to “ When I set my mind to something”. When you were sharing after your weakness I observe mistakes with the tenses. Since it already occured to you, you should use past tense from I have a hard time to I had a hard time.
ReplyDeleteThank you Joshua ! Keep up the good work.
Hi Irdina,
DeleteThank you for your input! I am grateful for the feedback and will edit my letter accordingly. All the best, and I look forward to seeing you in class!